My best holidays were in July of this
year when my girlfriend and I traveled to “Torres Del Paine”, located in the
south of Chile. There are many reasons to say that this holidays were the best
I’ve ever had, first of all I had never traveled by plane, but in those
holidays I had the opportunity to do it, it was an amazing experience
especially when the plane takes off, it was so fun. The second reason whereby I
choose this holidays is because my girlfriend and I had the chance to know many
beautiful places and people in Puerto Natales and Punta arenas, the people in
the hostel was so friendly and dedicated to bring the best services for the
travelers. In addition, Finally and the
most important reason was the trekking to the base of the towers, were we saw
beautiful landscapes, rivers, waterfalls and we have the opportunity to know
the “Torres del Paine” and also we did a tour to the most important places of
the national park, there was amazing sites in a natural environment
All of these reasons makes me choose
this holidays as the best I’ve ever had
That is a beatiful place and a big adventure. I'm not sure, but in the part "In addition, Finally and the most important reason" I was confused reading. TTrekking was the most important activity in your holiday?.The story was very fun.
ResponderBorrarSee You Nitolio.
PD: I was watching TV while I was reading your blog and... Chile won by secretary. xD
Hi Nitolio, your text is very good, but only change one thing, the phrase say "There are many reasons to say..." i would say "Exist many reason to say..."
ResponderBorrarbye bye
My best holidays were in July of this year when my girlfriend and I traveled to “Torres Del Paine”, located in the south of Chile. TS
ResponderBorrarThere are many reasons to say that [this] THESE holidays were the best I’ve ever had, first of all I had never traveled by plane, but (in those holidays) I had the opportunity to do it, it was an amazing experience especially when the plane takes off, it was so fun. The second reason whereby I [choose] CHOSE [this] holidays is because my girlfriend and I had the chance to know many beautiful places and people in Puerto Natales and Punta arenas, the people in the hostel [was] WERE!! so friendly and dedicated to bring the best services for the travelers. [In addition??], [ Finally ?] and the most important reason was the trekking to the base of the towers, wHere we saw beautiful landscapes, rivers, waterfalls and we [have] the opportunity to know the “Torres del Paine” and also we did a tour to the most important places of the national park, [there was] (SINGULAR) amazing [sites] (PLURAL in a natural environment (full stop?)
CS?
Daniel,
You have got a topic sentence, fine; it is not 100% clear to distinguish between SUPPORTING SENTENCES v/s EXAMPLES-EXPLANATION. You need to work on punctuation to distinguish them. Check the spelling of words and consistency SING-PL please.
A concluding sentence was obligatory in this exercise, you missed it.